Thanks for creating this awesome adventure. Hoping I can rope the Mrs into playing with the kids and I on this one since though she loathes Star Wars she loves her a good murder mystery.
I have a few questions and I hope you can give me your insight as the author:
1. What is the deal with the Imperial officer? What does he hope to gain by shivving the PCs? Even if he were to kill them all he is still locked in a holding room with armed guards outside. If his motive is escape, why wait until spec ops shows up to execute his plan? Why not just wait until there was no attention on him and then deal with a couple of minion guards? I can't figure out where this encounter fits in to the adventure. His actions don't seem to represent a hardened, feared enemy agent. I think he would rather be trying to subtly obtain info from the PCs so that he could use it to plan his escape during the confusion of the inevitable climax while the ship was distracted.
2. Why are the body parts in Loading Bay B? I assume all the badness was going on in Bay C since the cameras were routinely shut off once per month when the Bay was signed out to medical.
3. How were the body parts getting off ship? Was the Firespray making regular visits to pick up the contraband? If so would the Merciful's crew think they were there for other reasons?
4. The TIEs bother me. I think they would have been harassing the Merciful the entire time in attempt to drive it out of the system thus turning the tide of battle for the Imperials as the rebels lose their medical support and means of evacuation. I understand they are there to set the momentum of the adventure and to give players the chance to roll some dice, but would it be more feasible to have the shuttle make a break for it solo? Or maybe have an escort with the Merciful- one the TIEs feared and thus stayed away from?
5. Finally, and probably most importantly, if I understand the plot correctly Zarander was in deep with Falstrom when it came to selling the organs, but he bailed when he figured out Falstrom was actually killing patients for the parts. Is this correct?
I apologize if this is all nitpicky but I really want the lid on this thing tight before I run it with the family. They tend to think like I do and I anticipate needing an explanation for the above.