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Chapter XI: Against the Savages
Posted 24 June 2012 - 02:52 AM
Where did House Gibraham get a battalion of Land Raiders? How many space marine chapters did they mug to collect that?
Leman Russ tanks sure, but Land Raiders?
Posted 25 June 2012 - 07:17 PM
I've already sent this in an e-mail, but I'm putting it here for completeness' sake.
Page 256- Bottom of left column under Native Compound description "fortified structur mounted" should be "fortified structure mounted".
Posted 26 June 2012 - 08:34 PM
pg260 Second Paragraph "…the War Trakks begin the assault by
attempting to blast a hole through the outer wall (AP 16)."
The War Trakks are not listed on pg259(or in any subsequent paragraph)
Big Mek Zagwizza leads the approaching Ork force. These
Orks are members of Warboss Tufgob’s Waaagh! and are
equipped with gear that they brought with them to the planet
or looted from Imperial forces. His forces include the following:
-Five Lootaz (see page 239) led by a Nob (see page 239).
- Five Burna Boyz (see page 239) led by a Nob (see
-A Looted Hellhound Flame Tank (see page 157).
-One Wierdboy (see page 242).
Posted 28 June 2012 - 03:24 PM
Page 249 Planetary Ressources, repetitive style:
Because of the limited population, Skrynne has been
historically incapable of tithing soldiers for the war effort. […]
Historically, the planet’s manufacturing base has been
limited. With the exception of the recently discovered
promethium, the world’s mineral resources are limited.
Apparently, the world's copy of the Imperial Dictionary is also limited in its variety.
Posted 28 June 2012 - 03:49 PM
Page 253 Into the Fray, typo
Moments after the Player Characters defeat their foes, the
battlefield becomes much quieter. The sounds of slugga and
lasgun fire fades largely into the distance. Lieutenant Garven
Schrilblut (use Imperial Guardsman from page 244), but
increase all of his Characteristics by +10, and give him the Air
of Authority Talent) of the Brontian Longknives approaches.
The bracket after "page 244" is superfluous.
Posted 07 July 2012 - 12:45 PM
In the NPC Appendix, starting at page 261, there are a few typographical errors.
-- Skrynn Autochthon should be Skrynne Autochthon.
-- In the description text for Big Mek Gargmek Zagwizza, Warboss Tufgob's name is mispelled as Tuffogb, and Gargmek Zagwizza's own name is mispelled Garmek.
In addition, on page 259, when listing the Big Mek's forces, it should be listing a Weirdboy, not a Wierdboy.
Posted 13 July 2012 - 05:20 PM
pg. 257, C1, "Downed Valkyrie":
"As the squad travels through the jungle, suddenly they hear the sounds of gunfrie from the air and the roar of engines."